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How to Horror: Proxies of Slenderbeings
How to Horror: Proxies of Slenderbeings
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Introduction
Originally I was going to do this in one huge chunk, with proxies being just one of the many topics I covered on one huge "slave/minion" How To Horror, but I decided against it last minuet~ Now if you don't know what a proxy is think of the slave trade, like any one there has ever been. Proxies are basically serv
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Creepypasta OC template
Make sure to take all he italicized words out~
•Basic info•
Pasta name (not their actual name, what people know them as):
Name:
Nickname:
D.O.B (Date of Birth):
Age:
Species:
Currently living:
•family•
Mother:
Father:
Brother:
Sister:
other family members:
•physical features•
Height:
Weight:
Tattoo(s):
Scar(s):
Other noticeable mark(s):
Physical strength(s):
Physical weakness(es):
•about him/her•
Personality:
Like:
Dislikes:
Back story:
How(s)he kills:
Saying:
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Introduction
I pulled this from my main DA as I believe it's time I had a clear out but I thought this is very important. I could talk endlessly about this topic in reviews and how to's but I think that this is still the best thing I've written regarding this topic.
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I actually like this, it's very much pact with vision like I'm almost in the scene. However, I think it would be more clearer if you described the area more and the person lucky is helping. At times I was very confused because it was all a little rushed and I wasn't too sure what was going on.
To help you with your grammar, sentences etc,
At "Here you are, alone in an empty apartment" I would put a full stop there then start the sentance with "With"
From "the rabbit asks of you" the word "the" needs a capital "T"
After "Time to get some more money" could describe more about what he has to do, rather than rush into it.
And I think it's "Jacket Cuffs"
From "Luck is right anyhow" add a full stop then take away "That"
From "Are you bothering my friend?" The next word after that should start with a capital letter
"Who said that?!" Next word starts with a capital letter
But besides that good job. I found it quite interesting, fairly easy to read but not so easy to understand right away without reading it a few times over. So more description and the minor corrections I've suggested would be my advice. Good luck and happy writing!